Hey man,
First off, welcome to the forums.
Everyone here would love to see you play the solo you were talking about, however, if you really wish to be critiqued properly by the members here, please post a video of yourself playing the solo (with a backing track or a metronome. your hands should be clearly visible for people to look at your technique)
Also, there is a post in the forums which tells how to upload a video to the forums. check that out.
we're waiting for your first video :)
(P.S I have seen the video. I do not consider myself good enough to critique others. But, what i can say is please zoom out a bit more from now on. we should be able to see both your hands properly at all times.)